In the park——皮皮作文网

Today is Sundy. I’m in the park. The park is big and clean.

There  is an aviary in the park. There are many birds in the aviary. There is a  plant house beside the aviary. There are some little trees, much grass  and some flowers in the plant house. And I can see a pond near the plant  house. There are three ducks in it. And there is a playground behind  the pond. Many children are playing in th playground. Some boys are  playing football. Some girls are flying kites.

I’m under the big tree. I am drawing the park. I am happy.

点评：本篇小短文出自一位四年级小朋友之手。文章没有华丽的修饰词；没有很难的语法知识，但文章思路清晰，层次清楚。首先，用短短的三句话介绍了时间、地点及公园的大概情况。然后用较大的篇幅；不同的句型介绍在公园里所见的人和事。最后，用刚学的进行时态介绍自己。